The poster, [Walking with Time] posted on 2008-2-1420:41:35 |

I read the first two books of Lao Lai in the past two days, and I felt that it had made great progress.

Spring guang suddenly ejaculates like the seemingly pure supernatural powers now, but one has to sleep and the other does not need to sleep, the other can sense that the place where he is not.

However, the emotional line in the whole book can only be said in one word - false!

If you want to stud, don’t feel sorry for anyone. If you are ISS with one woman, ISS feel sorry for another woman. You think a lot when you kiss. You are so calm. Then why do you kiss? It’s always a “shock” and your bones are sore.

The legend of romantic encounters is a bit better, but it doesn’t have the fake feeling, but it still gives people a very hypocritical feeling. You feel sorry for stealing "love" for the first time, but what about the second time? Why do you still feel sorry in the future?

It seems that it has become much purer and only has feelings for Jia Jia. Others are impulsive. It is normal to have some inexplicable feelings after having sex with the beauty, which makes it a lot of "reality".

I have a general look at Lao Lai’s book and found that there are two main problems:

First, love analysis. For the analysis of the plot, the judgment of intrigues of various forces can be made, but the deadbeat is advised to give up the analysis of some words and only need to mention it when it is necessary to remind readers to pay attention.

For example, the best young master,

a mentioned "It's good to be a woman"

B thought: "I didn't appreciate the specific meaning of 'being a woman'"

This is enough. If this sentence is put into the book of Dalai Lai, Dalai will analyze the specific meanings of "being a woman", "being a woman", "being a woman", "being a good" and so on, which will make readers disgusted, and just mention it a little, telling the reader that this sentence has other mystery, so that the readers will experience it themselves.

People don’t like things that are too simple. For example, even if the first grader student who doesn’t like studying the most, he will definitely like to do questions in the fifth grade of elementary school than 1+1=? If you analyze such questions too comprehensively, readers will lose the fun of reading and gradually lose the taste, and they will feel that your book is becoming more and more empty and less worth reading, which is not good.

The second is the setting for the opponent. In the three books, you can say that there are no specific opponents.

For example, the first prince in Huiming last year was the corrupt court, and the ministers and eunuchs who formed gangs were the first to be clear. The goal gradually emerged from the beginning to the end.

The superficial history that followed was the best servant. Although the opponents were constantly changing, each of them chose very strongly. The beginning was Bailian, then Prince Cheng, then Turks, and then Japanese pirates. It was not easy to completely defeat each opponent. It required great efforts and life.

But there is no rival to the book of Lao Lai or I didn't find it

Chunguang's opponent was two people who had thought about Xue mm, but it was basically not challenging. When the two people started to attack Tianchou, Tianchou had already had the capital to resist, so it was meaningless.

The opponents of the legendary encounter are those who framed and destroyed the salon, but the defeat was too simple and meaningless, and they felt that it was quite empty.

It seems that I am not easy to judge the book Pureness. At present, Huang Long of Tianji Sect can be regarded as an opponent, but since he has lost, he will become an opponent in three years, and he will be a helper within these three years.

Mr. Yuan is cunning and doesn't know what An is thinking, but it seems that he is not hostile to Yang Rui and is not an opponent, and Yuan or the others in the Chen family are not considered enemies. In this way, at least there is no opponent now. If a big dragon is arranged at the end, then more than 160 chapters should have been laid, but now there is only one incident of being sniped and aimed at, but there is no mention of any other chain.

1st floor, [Walking with Time] Posted on 2008-2-1420:50:30

The development of career and love is a common way of writing urban novels nowadays, but the business development of Lao Lai always starts with something unrealistic. Even if the final outcome may be realized, it still lacks a little taste. Lao Lai might as well take a look at the beginning of other urban commercial novels. Learn it and you will definitely gain.

The three novels are all studded routes, and their positioning is from dedicated to passionate. The transition between them requires a very reasonable step, this step... For example, the letters left by Coco after leaving after leaving in the legend of romantic encounters are very good. Not only can a dedicated man accept it, but also a woman.

It seems that pure will take great danger. Jia Jia is already moved. If she is passionate, she will definitely hurt her, but the other mm is not on the same front with her. Hehe, look at how you mess with her, she smiles...

4th floor, [5630365] published on 2008-2-1422:01:11

LZ said it in detail, but one thing is that the characteristic of Lao Lai's book is that it loves analysis, which is a major advantage. Lao Lai raised some analysis to the level of theory, not just a long story. LZ should take a closer look at this point.

As for the specific opponent, haha, if LZ reads carefully, you will find some of the foreshadowings in the previous ones, o(∩_∩)o

Last point, everyone has their own characteristics. It’s meaningless to learn from others. Just learn from them. Hahaha

13th Floor, [m Pig Flying in the Sky] Posted on 2008-2-1422:35:06

There is also the poster who said that the biggest opponent has not appeared or even laid a prelude. I think there are enough preparations. Huanglong and his son? Is it a prelude to send snipers? There is also the poster who is not sure about his origin. It is also the poster who says that the development of business is unrealistic, but what other cities write must be realistic? The business development is very complicated. Isn’t it good to write novel points? Haha, it’s not just about my opinion with the poster.

18th Floor, [Superman Generation] published on 2008-2-1510:06:13 | Delete posts | Add essence
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